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bedraggled and torn with
dusty,
grimy,
mottley hair,
hidden
beneath a mask of
mud and
dust, frozen
by the
dark cold of
damp snow,
as tears fall down his
face
he pulls the
newspaper closer and
sits on the hard,
cold,
concrete with
his only possesions
he has and possibly the only
he will ever own
his notebook and
pen,
as the tears slide down
upon his cheek
he spills his soul onto
a paper nobody will ever
read,
what a shame,
what a shame,
the poor faceless poet,
dying alone,
his paper as a companion and
his pen as his guide,
what a shame,
what a shame,
this faceless poet must face
his greatest fear, his
greatest hope
on the streets in a
world as harsh and dead as this,
what a shame,
what a shame.
©2007-2009 ~EmberNekoNinja
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okay so this is a poem I wrote one night when I couldn't sleep there is no rhyme or reason behind it I just want to see what people think I consider this to be one of my best and I hope you think so too I would really like it if you comment and give me some constructive criticism I'm a fast learner all I need is a teacher.

thanks for reading!
~*~Ember~*~
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Wow! Nice Poem! I think I may put up some Poems To!

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thanks

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copy and paste this onto your siggy and show how random you are! ^-^
AWESOME!!! Very powerful. And at the same time kinda sad. But nonetheless very very good. Luvs it!
:licking:

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very spellbounding the words are powerful

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There's a message in my Alphabet Cereal that says ooooOOOOOO, THOSE ARE CHEERO'S (Family Guy)
thank you ^-^

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"Being random is like drinking a cup of tea, you never know what will jump out and try to eat you."
~EmberNekoNinja

copy and paste this onto your siggy and show how random you are! ^-^
your welcome :love:

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More Creature Than Human
There's a message in my Alphabet Cereal that says ooooOOOOOO, THOSE ARE CHEERO'S (Family Guy)
yay :floating: :w00t: :hug:

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"Being random is like drinking a cup of tea, you never know what will jump out and try to eat you."
~EmberNekoNinja

copy and paste this onto your siggy and show how random you are! ^-^
:giggle: :hug: :woot:

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More Creature Than Human
There's a message in my Alphabet Cereal that says ooooOOOOOO, THOSE ARE CHEERO'S (Family Guy)
I think you should cut the ands at the end of the lines
For example

his notebook and
pen,

Could be
his notebook,
his pen,

and

his greatest fear, his
greatest hope

could be

his greatest fear,
his greatest hope

By repeating the same beginning, you give more strength to the words you speak

But nice emotions :)

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